Kidnapping a Captain ~ by SaralynArati

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Many thanks, LadySky!! You're wonderful to say so! I'm trying to stay more or less within the framework of the original's pivotal events, but with my own slant.

6 years ago

LadySky

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What a great way to reinterpret Mulan from the movie's banishment and your Mulan's exile. As always, beautifully written!

6 years ago

SaralynArati

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Thanks very much, as always, Lexia!! I hope I don't make you regret your decision to hold this contest, as I may go all the way through to the end of the film with my story, and that's a good few more dolls. I'm just really wordy that way...

6 years ago

DysMalLexia

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As always this story is deeply tense and interesting with lots of little attention to details. Loving the scene you've set with the dolls and the sword is as always beautiful!

6 years ago

SaralynArati

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Thank you so, so much, Yellow!! To be perfectly honest, my own indecision over that point is part of why I stopped writing with this doll where I did. When I reach a conclusion, you'll be the first to know! ;)

6 years ago

Yellowauthor

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I love how you're sticking to the original story, in that she's banished before her heroism is fully realized, but for a different, unique reason! I'm very curious to see how the tiger and the man will be reintegrated--if it will be one smooth, fluid motion, or a rather slow, painful process, seeing as he has clearly been fighting his feelings for some time â¦

6 years ago

SaralynArati

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"Sleep!" whispered Mulan to the soldiers standing watch, and they slumped gradually to the ground. Slipping inside, she discovered why no search parties had come for her that afternoon; probably Li Shang had been in no shape to issue orders to that effect. He definitely wasn't now, tossing fitfully under a light blanket and muttering in his sleep. Spots of feverish color burned in his cheeks and whatever he was seeing in his dreams, or hallucinations, it wasn't pleasant by the look of things.

6 years ago

SaralynArati

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Furthermore, this might be her last opportunity to try to make Shang whole again, since after tonight Fa Lu-Long would have to leave the vicinity to avoid being caught. Like a shadow, Mulan silently crept into the sleeping camp. She was pretty sure that, if she needed the assistance, the Jade Lotus would help her pass unnoticed, possibly render her invisible, and maybe even allow her to fly for short distances. She didn't want to over-rely on its magic, but the Captain's tent was guarded.

6 years ago

SaralynArati

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The girl, the tiger, and the sword spirit took shelter in a crumbling stone hut some distance from the camp, where Mulan cleaned and bandaged Shi-Yang's wound while Yu Lien watched for any approaching soldiers. Surprisingly, none came all that day, but though neither the bearer nor the guardian of the Sword of the Heroine knew exactly how to reintegrate Li Shang, since this had never happened before in the weapon's history, Mulan was somehow certain that neither man nor cat could heal alone.

6 years ago