Finally finally completed chapter 1 (the re re re write of it hurrah). And I am finally PLEASED with how it came out and hoo boy. It is done. http://www.dolldivine.com/stories/PinkRobin-26276 #ApocryphasEdge#lolita
Please let me know what you think :D
Thank you all so much :D Honestly the full exchange between Ysdraille and Seretice wasn't really planned but, I thought, "Oh well it happened lets leave it in and see how this works". And the Chant of Secrets almost got deleted too but I'm glad everyone seems to like it :)
Took me a minute to get the time to read it but I swear, with each AE rewrite it's gotten better and better! The chant of the court of secrets, especially, had me hooked omg, and the paragraph with the "Princesses must be perfect" was my favorite paragraph of the entire chapter, I just love you attention to detail (in both dolling and writing :D) I adored the interaction between Seretice and Ysdraille <3 All and all great job, Pink! Excited to read more as you get to it :D
She's so cute! I read the chapter, it's a good start :D My favorite line of all though was: 'If there wasn't some sort of assassination at this ball they'd turn up their perfectly powdered noses and call it a bore.' But I liked the exchange with her brother too :)
Yaaaaaay, can't wait to read the re-re-rewrite of the first chapter! Will let you know what I think after I read it :D And Seretice looks gorgeous as always :)
